【IELTSライティング】タスク2例題と「6.0→8.0」の解答例

【IELTSライティング】タスク2スコア「8.0」解答例と例題

こんにちは、SOLO IELTS TOEFLのルークです。

IELTSのライティングタスク2の全5パターンの例題と解答例を6.0→8.0のスコア別に紹介します。

自分のライティングがどのぐらいか参照にしてください

タスク2の概要と対策

IELTSのライティングは1時間で、タスク2はおおよそ40分、文字数は250字以上です。

タスク2の内容は、問に対してエッセイを書く形式で、5つの問のパターンがあります。

自分の意見に理由と例を上げながら論理的にまとめ、読み手に納得させる必要があります。

タスク2の評価基準

まずはタスク2のライティングの評価基準を把握しましょう。それに沿って書くことが大切です。

  • 1.(TR) タスク達成度 25%
  • 2.(CC) 内容の一貫性 25%
  • 3.(LR) 語彙力 25%
  • 4.(GR) 文法 25%

7.0以上の高スコアを狙うに当たってTRとCCがボトルネックになる人が多いです

評価のポイント

タスク2のそれぞれの評価項目と評価のポイントを確認しましょう。

  • (TR) 問に答えているか / アイデア、理由、例は明確か
  • (CC) 段落の使い方 / 文章を結びつける語句の使用
  • (LR) 適切な単語選択 / 複合語 / 類似語 / 難易度の高い単語の使用
  • (GR)正確で幅広い文法の知識をバランスよく使用 / 複文の使用

問に答えるなんて当たり前のようですが、これが一番難しいです

参考: 【問の把握と分析】IELTSライティング

タスク2の基本的な型

タスク2は以下の型に沿って書くことをお勧めします。

  • 1. 導入: 2-3文
  • 2. ボディ: 3文
  • 3. ボディ2 : 3文
  • 4. 結論: 1-2文

タスク2は問の種類が5パターンありますが、どれもこの型に沿って書くと良いです。

ただし、パターンにより「型」の中身は変化させる必要があります。詳しく知りたい人は下記の記事を参照にしてください。

参照: 【問の種類とストラクチャ】IELTSライティング

例題と6.0→8.0解答例

ここからライティングタスク全5パターンのサンプル例題と解答例を紹介します。 6.0から 8.0の解答例を順に載せてあります。

できれば先に実際に自分でライティングしてみてください

パターン1: 意見 ( 賛成と反対 )

まずは最もよく出る問「賛成か反対」かについてエッセイを展開するものです。

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

agree、disagreeという単語が確認できますね。

6.0のサンプル解答例

スコア6.0のソロの生徒が書いたエッセイが以下です。

Doing sport is the best way to have a healthy body and mind and has the most impact on everybody’s health, however, some types of sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous. Some people think that extreme sports should be banned because of their drawbacks. I believe extreme sports like sky diving, skiing and surfing should not be banned based on many reasons.

First of all, these sports can help countries to have a better economy. Some extreme sports can be done just in specific areas. For example, Canada is the most suitable place for skiing. People from all around the world come to Canada to do skiing. ski.This tourist attraction will improve the Canada’s economy. Secondly, banning is associated extreme sports correlating(es )with people’s job losses. Extreme sports make various types of jobs. There are many is a lot of equipment which are is necessary for doing to do extreme sports, many companies make these this equipment and several workers work in these companies. Finally, extreme sports have a wonderful impact on their fans. There are many, many people who like extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing. They enjoy when doing or watching these sports and it is a big part of their life. Banning extreme sports have has a terrible impact on them.

To conclude, there are many sports which are very dangerous like sky diving and skiing. Some people think that these types of sports should be banned, ; however, I believe that banning extreme sports is associated with many huge problems so, extreme sports should not be banned. (255 words)

評価の詳細

詳しい評価をみてみましょう。

  • TA: 問全般に対して述べられているがバランスが悪い
  • CC: 論理的に述べらているがCohesive Devicesの使用のバランスが悪い
  • LR : 適切な範囲で語句の使用をしている。単語の選択とスペルミスがある
  • GR: 単文、複文を使用している。句読点や文法の間違いが散見される。

6.0はまだ文法と語彙に間違いが散見されます

パターン2: 双方の視点からの論理展開

次に、双方の視点を上げつつも自分の意見を展開するパターンの問を見てみましょう。

Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human’s life.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

both viewという単語の確認によりこのタイプの問だとわかります。

6.5の解答例

It is true that some traditional value could be out of date and incompatible with today’s world. However, I do not believe that all the information accumulated from the past is completely useless.

It is undeniable that some experience experiences and ideas are old-fashioned that become have become irrelevant to our present life. For example, the definition of a good woman nowadays is very different from the old-time old times. Traditionally, an ideal woman is to become a housewife. She should stay at home, do chores, cook and look after her children. And most importantly, she must obey her husband. Females in the past were therfore therefore forced to sacrifise sacrifice their education, career and even personal will. Compared to today, thanks to the contribution of equal rights movements, women now have the equal social position and opportunities as men do from in every aspect. The traditional criteria for females are nearly abandoned in most developed countries.

In spite of the example given above, I believe there
are is some significant information from the history that is useful for our life today. From a personal perspective, history could help individuals have the ability to analyze some formal problems we face today, like to clear solve the controversy of international political issues. We can only distinguish the information released by manipulated media and find the truth if we understand what happend happened before. On a broader societal level, history is a great reference for governments deciding what measures to take in order to rule the countries well. For example, we can learn from the history that imposing heavy taxes could possibly trigger citizens’ rebellion.

In conclusion, I agree with the idea that we can learn much from the history and we should not dismiss all the information from the past.
(287 words)

評価の詳細

詳しく評価を見てみましょう。

TA: 選択された範囲では描写できているが、片方の情報の比重が多い
CC: 接続後が巧みに使われており、よく組織された文となっている
LR : 適切な範囲の語彙を使用しているがスペルに謝りがみられる
GR: 複文を多用しているが、冠詞に多く間違いがある

6.5では文法、語彙の間違いは6.0と比べて少なくなりましたが問に十分に答えられていません

パターン3: メリットとデメリットの提示

メリットとデメリットをあげるタイプの問です。

It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole.

What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

advantages and disadvantagesという単語が確認できます。

7.0の解答例

Once, travelling to remote natural environments was not possible because of different difficulties associated with transportation, communications and knowledge. However, technological advances have made it possible for people to travel to remote places in the world, such as the South Pole.

First of all, new and cheaper means of transportation have made the South Pole more accesible accessible both to scientists and tourists. Thus, this accessibility accessibility carries some disadvantages for the environment itself. In fact, the South Pole is a remote, harsh and delicate environment, which has been preserved during centuries thanks to its natural and isolated conditions. Any Increase in the number of visitors of any kind carries out different threats to the ecosystem. For example, the more tourists arrive, the more litter is likely to be thrown in this environment. Also, the environment itself has to be altered in order to receive more people. Buildings have to be constructed to foster people coming to visit the South Pole, which implies a disturbance of the biodiversity of this particular ecosystem.

On the contrary, History has shown also that development can bring more benefits than disadvantages, when carried out properly. For scientists, being able to investigate remote natural environments, like the South Pole, means that knowledge is expanded. It will help new scientific discoveries to be made, and thus broaden our understanding of the world. This development is also a mayor major break through because tourists can visit natural ecosystems that were once only reserved for scientists. It helps them to learn the importance of that particular environment, and thus will increase the possibility of taking care of it in the future.

In conclusion, development in travel to remote natural environments has different perspectives and consequences in the ecosystem as a whole. It should be addressed carefully so that no major negative impacts will affect it. Development is crucial for understanding the world we live in, and the way we can protect it for future generations to come.

評価の詳細

スコア7.0の評価の詳細を確認してみましょう。

TA: 問に対しての解答は全て行われいる。アイデアに対するサポーティングもクリアであるが、一般化しすぎる傾向がある
CC: Cohesive deviceの使用は上手だがもう少し使用頻度を増やす余地がある。各パラグラフの中心となるトピックがわかりやすい
LR : 広範囲の単語を柔軟にかつ正確に使用している。難しい単語やコロケーションも使用しているが、スペルミスに改善の余地がある
GR: 複文を使用したりしているが文法間違いや句読点の間違いが極稀にある

文法、語彙の間違いはほとんんどなくなりましたが、アイデアに対する理由と例に説得力が欠けます

パターン4: 問題の原因と解決策の提示

問題の原因と解決策の提示を行うタイプの問をみてみましょう。

People in all modern societies use drugs, but today’s youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example.

Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

cause、effect、recommendationなどからこのタイプの問だと分かります。

7.5の解答

Drug abuse has been reported in all societies in the modern age. However, adolescents nowadays tend to experiment with all types of drugs, at an earlier and earlier age. If, as sociologists claim, parents and other people are the ones setting the bad example, what can be done to solve this problem?

First, the causes of why teenagers are consuming drugs should be considered. One of the main causes for this problem may be found at each of our houses. Many of our parents and older family members smoke and drink alcohol frequently. If this is done by the generation that is supposed to set the example, how can teenagers believe when they are told that legal drugs such as these are bad for their health? Furthermore, we often see on newspapers and tv stories of celebrities using illegal drugs. For example, it is not difficult to find tv series with protagonists who take drugs, as “Suits”, “13 reason why Reason Why”, and so on.

However, the intake of drug substances by young people can have serious consequences in their lives. Drug usage has been proven to prejudice impede cerebral growth, for example. Naturally, drug users may have difficulty processing and retaining information. In this case, this means poor results at school. More importantly, drug abuse has been correlated to the appearance of some psychological diseases, such as bipolarism and borderline syndrome. I, for instance, have seen this happen to two friends of mine who, because of drug abuse, have seen their life significantly impaired.

To conclude, drug abuse is a problem that( , )many times( , )starts at home with parents and other role models setting a bad example. This means teenagers do not look at drug consumption seriously and they do not think how drugs might limit or destroy their life, mainly as a student. I believe that to fight this issue, we must invest in education. It is vital to instill critical thinking at an ealy early age, to help young minds to look at their surroundings and identify what is a good example and what is not. Another solution might be to spread stories of fight against combating drug abuse by celebrities, for example. I believe this could inspire teenagers to pay attention to this issue. In short, education and stories by positive young models might be a good solution. (387 words)

評価の詳細

7.5のスコアの詳細を確認してみましょう。

TA: 問に対して十分に解答されている。アイデアに対するサポーティングもクリアである
CC: 流れが論理的かつ明確。パラグラフの使用の仕方も効果的かつ適切
LR : 広範囲の単語を柔軟にかつ正確に使用している。難しい単語を使用しているが、まれに語彙の選択ミスやスペルに間違いがある
GR: 複文を使用しておりほとんどエラーがない文章構築。文法間違いや句読点の間違いが極稀にある

TAとCCのおける展開は「適切」ですが、ところどころ文法や語彙の間違いがあります

パターン5: 質問に対する解答

質問に対する解答のタイプの問題です。

There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global
temperatures higher.


What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

causeやdeal withといった単語からパターン4と同様のタイプだと分かります。

8.0の解答例

Global temperature has increased consistently over the years and it is evident that man-made activities are one of the main reasons. In order to solve this issue, there are a few measures needed to be taken by the government and the people. In this essay, I will analyse the causes and provides solutions.

Firstly of all, trees and forests have been burned to make lands for houses and commercial buildings. This inevitably causes a rise in the temperature and pollution on earth. The best solution to this problem is to make full use of the land we have.

Governments should encourage construction companies to build more apartments than houses. The reason behind this is that apartments can accommodate more people and it takes up less land. Also, governments should implement laws to limit the numbers of buildings used for commercial purposes, such as the supermarkets and fast food chains. If we can control the limits of these buildings, we will be able to save forests from being destroyed.

In addition, factories and cars are also the reasons for the cause of air pollution and the increase in temperatures around the world. Governments can look into upgrading their infrastructures and public transport systems to make travelling more convenient and accessible. Hence, vehicles would not be necessary anymore. Otherwise, we can encourage people to purchase electric cars over normal cars. To a certain extent, it can help to reduce air pollution. Governments can create stringent guidelines and regulations to prevent factories and vehicles from over polluting the earth.

Finally, over use of electricity by households and companies are is causing global temperatures to rise. We can educate the young people through organising campaigns and going to schools for educational talks. Company’s leaders can also encourage their employees to save electricity by turning off lights, computers and air conditioners when not in use.

To sum up, I think burning of trees, forests, pollution from cars and factories and over use of electricity are some of the main factors for the increased in global temperatures. In order to eliminate these problems, everyone has a part to play. Minimising the use of cars, being conscious of the use of electricity and enacting stricter laws are just some of the different ways to solve these problems.

評価の詳細

スコア8.0のライティングの評価の詳細を見てみましょう。

TA: 問に対して十分に解答されている。アイデアに対するサポーティングもクリアである。
CC: 流れが論理的かつ明確。パラグラフの使用の仕方も効果的かつ適切。
LR : 広範囲の単語を柔軟にかつ正確に使用している。難しい単語を使用しているが、まれに語彙の選択ミスやスペルに間違いがある。
GR: 複文を使用しておりほとんどエラーがない文章構築。文法間違いや句読点の間違いが極稀にある。

8.0はほぼ完璧なエッセイです

如何だったでしょうか?

タスク1の対策をしていない人は以下を参考にしてください。

参照: IELTSライティング対策|タスク1例題と5.0→8.0解答例

英語の「今まで」と「これから」

最短で伸ばすならSolo

SoloはIELTSのスコアを最短で伸ばします。

自分だけで学習できる自信がない人は是非一度カウンセリングに来てみてね。

弊社のIELTSのプロ講師たちが待ってるよ。

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